Hope you had a marvelous New Years! I certainly did. I am so excited gearing up for the release of Hell School: Fresh Meat... FINALLY!! It will be out in March. If anyone is interested in being a Beta reader, let me know and I will be happy to send over a copy.
In the mean time, I am working on the front and back matter, and would love your input.
Which one do you think works better?
High School is supposed to be fun, but when Sam’s mom moves them across the country Sam finds herself starting over in a new school, in a new town, trying to make new friends.
As if that wasn’t hard enough, now she has a stalker.
Sam keeps getting letters and poems from someone claiming to be her secret admirer. Though some of her friends think it is very romantic, Sam wants nothing to do with it. Despite her efforts to stop the harassment, the letters keep coming… and getting creepier.
This story is based on true events.
Or...
Based on true events
Sam is dreading starting high school in a new school, in a new town, and having to make new friends. After her mother moves them across country, from Montana to South Carolina. Sam has to adjust to all the newness.
Being the new girl, Sam finds herself the romantic interest of several boys. But her “secret admirer” is the most persistent of all. Despite her efforts to discover who it is and get him to stop, the letters keep coming. What some friends first found romantic, quickly turns from annoying to terrifying.
Will Sam ever be safe?
Do either of these grab you? Are there bits and pieces you like? I would love your feedback in the comments below.
Until next time,
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Here's my thoughts for you - I hate blurbing, so I totally get it:
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Sam is dreading starting high school in a new school, in a new town, and having to make new friends. After her mother moves them from Montana to South Carolina. Sam has to adjust to all the newness.
As if that wasn’t hard enough, now she has a stalker.
Sam keeps getting letters and poems from someone claiming to be her secret admirer. Though some of her friends think it is very romantic, Sam wants nothing to do with it. Despite her efforts to stop the harassment, the letters keep coming… and getting creepier.
Karla,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the input! I really appreciate the help!
I like the second one, but for some reason don't like the word "newness". Just my two cents.
ReplyDeleteThanks! Every tip helps!
ReplyDeleteThe last one drives me. Except I did some editing to make it stand out better.
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Sam dreaded going to a new town, knowing she has to start at a new school. This means making new friends. Soon after her mother made the move, she found herself being the interest of someone, who people would call her "secret admirer." The problem is that this secret admirer turned into a stalker, terrorising her with unwanted letters, texts, and calls.
Will Sam ever find out who the stalker is?
Good luck with the book.
Thanks so much Harry!
ReplyDeleteIs there some way to add a little drama here? Like instead of "But her 'secret admirer'…" just cut to "Then the letters started." and build up the tension from there.
ReplyDeleteGood luck with the book launch!
Mars, thanks for the suggestions! A really appreciate it!
ReplyDeleteThe first one starts out as too much of a cliche. And yes, I think cutting to "Then the letters started is better."
ReplyDeleteThanks Joy, I appreciate your feedback!
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